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some people think that libraries are a waste of ressources and money. so computers should replace them. however,others do not agree. discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #libraries #waste #ressources #money #computers
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Certain individuals believe that libraries must replace with
electronic based computer
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an electronic based computer
electronic based computers
instead
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 of various
collection
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collections
 of volumes.
Nevertheless
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, others oppose
this
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 idea. Computers are not suitable to every person and books are familiar to each one. I believe in the latter because one can
highlights
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highlight
 the sentence and all scripts are not available in digital form. All are habituated to
text books
according to or characteristic of a casebook or textbook; typical
textbooks
 for any references to clear their doubts
in
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on
 the subject. Immediately by looking
in
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at
 the content or appendix page students can clarify their
confusion which
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confusion, which
 is not
cleared
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clear
 in the classroom
thought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 by the professor and can underline the particular phrase and note down the unique book code for
further
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 references.
For example
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, my project is on
functioning
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the functioning
 of micro controller 8501. In the library I gathered various information from several volumes about the chip in detail which I cannot even find
in
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on
 the websites. Generally, some people have problems in seeing the computer screen like colour allergy and cause infection to
eyes
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the eyes
. All book volumes are not available officially in the websites and management have to purchase from the website and few authors do not sale their patent rights to any website. They just publish in the paper format so that people can carry
with them to anywhere
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with them anywhere
. These days young people are using various
application
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applications
in
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on
there
of them or themselves
their
 tablet and mobile phone in order to read
books but
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books, but
 libraries are essential for the community to reference of various volumes. In conclusion, in
this
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 advanced technology
world people
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world, people
 are preferring to read stories and news
in
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on
 mobile phones. But I agree that libraries are not for single
person
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personal
usage it
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usage, it
 is for the public and it should not be replaced with computers. I urge
to
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for
 people to spend some time in reading to know about your ancestor culture activities and upcoming information.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resources
  • digital literacy
  • cultural hub
  • physical books
  • tactile learning
  • cost-effective
  • digitization
  • digital divide
  • environmental impact
  • hybrid model
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