Some people say that the main aim of advertising is to improve sales of products that people do not really need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a view that

manufacturers

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advertise their

goods

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as they aim to

increase

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the selling

process

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of unnecessary

products

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. I partially agree with

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perspective, since ads related to food and drinks can greatly benefit teenagers who love to eat. As marketing takes charge of advertising and introducing

products

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to the public, it is based on increasing the selling.

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, some

people

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think that

manufacturers

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advertise those

products

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which are less tradeable. Chairmen of manufacturing companies should accommodate the needs of the families of their employees and their own families.

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why they need to advertise their leftover

goods

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such

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as toys, sweets and cosmetics.

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, the owner of "Coca-Cola Company" realizes the selling

process

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is not satisfying him/her, so he tries to

increase

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it by advertising.

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, when a

process

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is not going well,

people

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need to contact the ones who are in charge of adverts. Actually,

people

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do not advertise their product when selling is complicated, they do it when they have fresh things too. Eventually, in order to

increase

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the

process

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of updating

goods

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manufacturers

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should make the public aware of it by advertising on the Net, TV or social media.

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, when "The Yandex Taxi Company" makes out a new type of service, it should introduce it to

people

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to make the taxi sales

increase

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, when

manufacturers

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get new

products

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, they need to make an attention-grabbing advert. In conclusion, even though

people

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believe that advertisements are here for only leftover

goods

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, in reality, it is not really like

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task achievement

Consider providing a clearer thesis statement in your introduction that explicitly outlines your position regarding advertising and unnecessary products.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that your paragraphs each focus on a single main idea that supports your overall argument.

coherence and cohesion

Strengthen your concluding statement by summarizing your main points clearly and reemphasizing your position.

relevant specific examples

You have included relevant examples which help to illustrate your points and show your understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

258 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

advertising
consumer behavior
perceived need
luxury goods
brand loyalty
psychological tactics
emotional appeal
social status
purchasing behavior
essential products
marketed
information dissemination
misleading
want vs need
consumer awareness

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Some people say that the main aim of advertising is to improve sales of products that people do not really need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

When asked to choose a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose to work. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Today, many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and businesses. Why do you think people do this? Are they any disadvantages of doing this?