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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the both methods and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that teaching children in one's own
home
 is most suited and finest for a child's
development
, whereas other people think that it is better for children to go to school for their
development
. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would disagree with the statement that teaching children at
home
 is best mainly because of key aspects
such
 as parent's
education
To begin
 with, teaching children at
home
 means that the parents should be able to teach children and make them understand the world better. But, for
this
 to happen efficiently, parents should have completed minimum up to higher secondary schooling. If they have not completed schooling properly,
this
 in turn hinders the children's
education
 and their
development
. If they teach children with the wrong kind of
education
, it would be tough for the children to rectify it while going to higher standards.
Further
, in
this
 contemporary world, it is likely that both men and women go to jobs to provide good
education
 and higher standards of living.
Therefore
, it is certain that children would be in the hands of grandparents or maids.
Hence
 there is less probability in providing good
education
 at
home
 for children.
On the contrary
, if the children are put into schools
such
 as children's day care to start with, it could have a major growth in children's learning. Usually in schools, there would be many children of similar age group and
hence
this
 type of learning to be in groups have a major impact on children's
development
.
In addition
 to that, most of the schools are coming up with entertaining and innovative ideas
such
 as learning by playing games, understanding the children's way of learning and providing
education
 to them.
This
 kind of innovative methods might engage children and develop their skills better when compared to learning in their
home
. To summarize, considering the advantages of schools, interactive learning and learning by playing, it would be better to develop the children's learning capabilities by putting them among same age group children rather than keeping at
home
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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