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Some people say that the education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Education
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 plays a vital role in the development of a
country
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.
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, some people think that the
education
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 system is the only important factor to the development of a
country
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 and they may be right.
Education
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 is the foundation of well developed society. It is rightly said, ‘
education
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 is a ladder for success’. If all the people of any
country
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 are educated
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 they
becomes
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become
 broadminded, civilized and progressive. An educated society improves the standard of life as well.
Besides
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this
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,
education
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also
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 creates a good employment opportunity and
therefore
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country
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 does not have to suffer from big problems like unemployment. Educated peoples are more aware of problems
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 as pollution and
many
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much
 more. A
country
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 becomes technologically advanced because of educated people. Not only
this
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, but
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 by giving importance to
education
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, the nations can get rid of problems like
iliteracy
ignorance resulting from not reading
illiteracy
, poverty, unemployment and population growth that delay the progress of a nation. The crime rate can
also
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 be kept under check. The standard of living of the people will go up. If the nations
wants
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want
 to be progressive it is very important that the people are more educated and progressive. Any
country
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 can become more technologically advanced and developed because of
education
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.
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, there are other factors that
also
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 play an important role in the development of a
country
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.
Such
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 as governments have to
encouraged
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encourage
 people to do so._ In conclusion, I would like to say that a good
education
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 system will lead to a developed
country
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.

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