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Some people say that a person's success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that a man is nothing but a reflection of his parents.
Further
, some people are of the opinion that a person's wellbeing and success are directly associated with his upbringing. I agree with
this
 view, because, in my humble opinion, successful man has successful habits and manners. Civil behaviour and healthy habits can be best framed in a human's mind when it is young. Civil obedience and successful habits which can be implemented to lead a prosperous life need years of efforts and practice.
This
 can be best taught to a child when his mind is young. A nascent brain is like clay, it can be moulded easily. As it ages, it becomes more like concrete - hard and rigid. To illustrate
this
, a study was done by a group of researchers at Columbia University. They taught a simple yet golden rule of "early to bed and early to rise" to a bunch of 10 juveniles and 10 adults. While, juveniles developed
this
 in less than 15 days, adults,
on the other hand
, adults took more than a few months to develop
this
 habit. In my view,
this
 illustrates well that best practices for leading a happy and prosperous life can be imbibed in a person at a young age easily.
Such
 sustainable exercise of healthy habits over a period of many years will lead to a glorious future of the child.
Furthermore
, it is observed that at a young age a child idolises his parents. He tries to copy everything that his parents do. A good example of
this
 is language. A youngster learns his mother tongue without any strenuous efforts.
On the other hand
, to learn any other language, it takes several years of hard work on his part.
Therefore
, it can be easily said that a man's habit, good or bad, is best shaped by his parents. To conclude, in my view, a person's upbringing and, particularly, his time with his parents play a very critical role in shaping up his future.
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