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some people want government to spend money on life on other planets, however, others think it is a waste of public money when the earth has so many problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a common phenomenon that more astronomer is searching for other planets in the universe where life exists. Some people believe that governments should invest money on seeking the life in other planets, but others insist that solving domestic issues and improving basic facilities are the priority tasks. I agree with the view that public funds should be used to improve people’s life quality. Seeking for more resources is the most important reason that governments should support
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 research. As we all know, some kind of resources will exhaust in the future,
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 as water and mineral. People have to discover more available resources from other planets for coming generations.
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, population on earth is increasing dramatically every year. Scientists are uncertain if the earth could take
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 a huge amount of population. Finding a new living sanctuary is necessary for human beings.
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 discovery is really helpful for collecting information and evaluate for that program.
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, some politicians argued that public funding should be used to solve the practical issues,
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 as poverty and illness. Considering the limited state budget, not all countries have the enough funds to support
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 research, governments have to focus on addressing domestic problems.
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, famine has hit many countries in Africa for years, and millions of people living in dire straits. Comparing with the visionary
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 discovery, governments have to spend a large amount of money to rescue people from property and famine
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, illness is another serious issue in many developing countries like cancer. Under the circumstances of government financial emergency, a relatively completed and developed medical system should get more financial support from the government
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 of
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 discovery. In my opinion, governments should pay more attention to address urgent issues rather than
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 exploration.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • extraterrestrial
  • terrestrial issues
  • poverty alleviation
  • sustainable
  • philosophical advancement
  • ethics
  • biological diversity
  • technological breakthroughs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal responsibility
  • humanity's place in the universe
  • pressing issues
  • critical resources
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