Some people think that exercise is the key to health, while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion (Chi Vu)

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variety of individuals assume that exercise is the main point to maintain

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that stability

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following paragraphs before presenting my personal perspective in the conclusion.

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the one hand, the most

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reason that physical activity

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important to

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released from nerve cells in the brain.

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pain relief.

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the other hand, having a balanced meal is the key to

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system, helping to ensure that the vitamins, minerals, and other nutrients necessary for its efficient function are available. Even minimal deficiencies in certain nutrients can impair immune system function,

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as vitamin B, vitamin C, and iron. In conclusion, both exercise and

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help people to have a wealth health.

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need to be combined and designed to be suitable to each individual,

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, it will bring

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You presented both views clearly, which shows a good understanding of the topic.

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Your conclusion summarizes the key points effectively and states your personal opinion.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that exercise is the key to health, while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion (Chi Vu)

Fully explain your ideas

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