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Wild animals have no place in the 21 St century and protection of wild animal is waste of resources.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#animals #place #st #century #protection #waste #resources
It is an irrefutable that,
preservation
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the preservation
 of fauna is the major concern of the government from the
last
 few decades as with rise in human population animals are losing their habitat.
Moreover
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,
it is proclaimed by some people that spending wealth on wildlife conservation is pointless as they consider
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 huge liability on government. To dive into the topic
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,
I completely discord with
this
 statement, mankind has no right to encourage the extinction of any
species
,
Furthermore
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,
due to unfavourable activities of human animals are losing their regions and people need to understand that
,
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,
planet Earth does not
exists
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exist
 for the
beney
 of only humans and masses have no authority to interrupt the ecological system
otherwise
this
 interference in future might lead to
disastrous outcome
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disastrous outcomes
a disastrous outcome
 To continue, protection of natural habitat for animals ensures the survival of various
species
.To be more specific, scientist predict that these habitats are crucial for human survival as it help stabilising the climate.
In addition
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,
if we destroy these areas the cost of managing the resulting changes would far outweigh the cost of conservation.To be more specific, protection of wild animals
have become
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has become
 need of an hour
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.
 After analysing
this
 issue from multiple
angles it
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angles, it
 can be stated that
,
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,
the
pla
have the will and intention to carry out some action
plan
play
pile
et
the thing named or in question
it
 is shared by all the
species
 and being one of the most intelligent
creature human
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creature, human
creature humans
creature humans humans
 should Maintain the balance of
Eco system
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the Eco system
 as each
species
 of
this
 realm plays a significant role and have great dependency over each other
.
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