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What technologies did you use to help you in your studies? Describe how it has helped you. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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There is no doubt that technological advancements have made big changes in the
education
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 sector. Advanced mobile and computer-based applications enable students to study regardless of time, place, and financial background. Any student from any corner of the world can access
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 remotely if that student
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 a smart device like a mobile phone or computer and an internet connection that connects that device to the global internet network. An application like Google
Classroom
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 enables professors to create a virtual
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 on the internet, though that
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 works the same as a real
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. Teachers can take video lectures, assignments, projects, quizzes, and other assessments too. These types of technologies help so many students living in remote regions who are
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 to come to college. These technologies came upfront and became popular during the pandemic,
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 it might have taken more years to get these types of technologies into real use. I can share
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 from my real-life experience. Before COVID-19, I was in my second year of engineering. My class teacher and my classmates already knew about virtual classrooms, but they never used them. When the pandemic happened in the year 2019, all our lectures, practicals, assignments, and project work were carried out online using virtual classrooms. Despite online lectures and practicals, the quality of studies was maintained at the same level as in real classrooms. In
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 way, advanced technological applications like Google
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 help us complete our
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 during the
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. In conclusion, I think advanced technological applications help everyone access
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 remotely.
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, students are able to get an
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 from top US universities sitting in Japan.
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task response
To improve task response, ensure that the essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt, including specific technologies used personally and detailed examples of how they helped in studies.
coherence and cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, work on linking ideas and paragraphs more smoothly. Use a range of cohesive devices and topic sentences that clearly signal the content of each paragraph.

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