Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. some think it is good, while others think it is a has disadvantages. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion?

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People have different views about the sponsoring of sports by the companies for the purpose of advertisement.
Although
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this
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approach has some drawbacks, It appears that it could be more beneficial. At the outset, advertising through sports-events could have some cons as it might be used for endorsing unethical products,
such
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as liquor, tobacco. It could be
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
for people, who are easily swayed by
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kind of endorsements.
Moreover
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, it has been witnessed that sales of products and services largely depend on the public-image of the players. Put simply, if the peak-performance is not displayed by the
sportsperson
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, the impact of
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could be seen on the sales graph. To exemplify, companies like to hire extraordinary players, to enhance their sales. Given the above explanation, it is advocated by some people that
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the sponsoring
of
sports event
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a sports event
is by no means the best way for the advertising.
On the other hand
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, numerous benefits can be taken if sports- tournaments are sponsored by companies.
Firstly
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, better concentration might be given
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the sports by the players, due to the monetary benefits given by the companies, which are sponsoring the events, that results in high-performance in games.
Secondly
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, sports accessories can be obtained, through sponsorship-contracts which might be impossible because of their high prices,
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as sports- shoes and dresses. Taken an example of Indian cricket team sponsor 'Biju'
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bearing all the expenses of the required accessories of all the players.
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, it would appear that the sports team can take the advantages of monetary benefits given by their
sponsor
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sponsoring
companies. In conclusion, while there is the existence of some demerits of sponsoring sports for advertising, I believe the merits as far more as compared to the former.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sponsorship
  • Visibility
  • Brand alignment
  • Financial backing
  • Commercialization
  • Authenticity
  • Advertisements
  • Corporate presence
  • Ethical considerations
  • Bias
  • Mainstream
  • Neglecting
  • Technological advancements
  • Innovation
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