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Although you are meant to present your thesis project in one month, your sister is getting married in Spain at the same time. You would like to change dates for your presentation. Write a letter to your professor. In your letter: •Explain the situation •Remind the professor of your academic achievements to date •Ask for a different date to present your thesis

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Dear Mr James, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I want to change the dates of my thesis
presentation
 to a fortnight because recently my grandmother fell ill after diagnosis doctors found that she had
last
-stage blood cancer. As you know my sister’s wedding in Spain and one week after her wedding my thesis
presentation
 took place . But now everything has changed
due to
 the illness of my grandmother. Even though the wedding date is now, we plan the wedding one week earlier. As you know I am one of the brightest student in the class. I attended all my classes and I completed my thesis on time but
due to
this
 sudden change, I am not able to give my
presentation
 on the given dates. I hope you understand my situation, postpone the
presentation
 and give me any next available date. I am waiting for your reply. Yours truly, Krunal
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coherence cohesion
Make sure your explanation is clear and straightforward to enhance understanding.
task achievement
Strengthen the connection between your academic achievements and the reason for the request.
coherence cohesion
Ensure grammatical accuracy to improve readability and professionalism.
writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriately formal.
task response
You have made a clear request for a change in the presentation date.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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