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Developed countries should take more refugees from poorer countries. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #refugees
Developed nations should take more asylum seekers who are displaced from their countries due to adverse conditions and give them all the fundamental necessities. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
 statement due to it is a moral obligation and opulent countries have enough resources to sustain poor shelterless people. Every country has a moral reason to support refugees who are coming from lands which are destroyed by natural calamities and
war like
disposed to warfare or hard-line policies
warlike
 situations. Nobody wants to leave their home unless it is indispensable to do so and if these countries refuse to support them
,
Accept space
,
they will certainly either be in danger of losing their lives because of starvation or step into crime world and become rebellion.
For example
,
Accept space
,
 Syrian have extremely poor condition with no food and
continuously
seemingly without interruption
continually
 surrounded with war environment and
hence
 millions of them have tried to flee their countries with or without their families in the search of safe future for themselves.
Thus
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Thus, this
this
 is evident that by accepting them these nations can make the world a more peaceful place to live in. Affluent countries have stable economies and infrastructure that can accommodate many other individuals.
This
 is to say because these countries have low population,
therefore
 they can easily accept innumerable refugees. Apart from that they have huge
budget which
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budget, which
are collected
Suggestion
is collected
 in the form of taxes from their citizens and indigenous companies.
For instance
, the estimated GDP of European Union is over $25 trillion and all Syrian refugees could be resettled for a less than a billion dollars.
Therefore
, these countries can provide refugees the basic amenities like food
,
Accept space
,
 shelter and clothes and can
also
 run myriad refugee assistance programs to help them to find a suitable job for their sustenance. In conclusion, the
third
 world countrie
s h
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have
as the onus to provide refugees the comfortable environment because of humanitarian obligation and to rehabilitate them because they can afford it easily

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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