Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in their exams should be awarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
The current education system emphasises grades and ranks, rather than progression. Is it better to reward top-scoring
students
or the ones who show development in their academics? I believe that it is a token of appreciation is necessary for individuals who demonstrate growth in their studies.
On one hand, students
who score high marks and get rewarded for it, do motivate others to focus more on their learning. Moreover
, it creates healthy competition which may increase the percentage of development. Pupils who strive to achieve top rank will know what they gain from scoring high. It will, consequently
, lead to gaining popularity while
receiving scholarships and special government grants for further
studies. A top scorer of a school, for instance
, may receive a scholarship or waived tuition fees for pursuing a higher degree. As a result
, some people firmly assert that students
with the highest rank or score must be rewarded.
On the other hand
, I strongly think that rewards must be given to tutees who, despite getting average ranks, show progression in their academics. Although
they may not gain a lot of popularity or grants, recognising their effort will provide extrinsic motivation for them to study. By doing so, students
will feel less pressure while
studying. For example
, if a secondary school child has shown quick growth in grades from past to current, his/her effort can be recognised by the institution with maybe a certificate which will motivate them to work harder. Acknowledging one's struggle, therefore
, can reduce mental stress and genuinely focus on their learning and development.
To conclude
, although
it is ideal to appreciate top scorers with different rewards. In my opinion, institutions should also
acknowledge and recognise the progress made by their students
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