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Some people think that media (newspapers) should publish information of people's private lives. While, others think newspaper should be controlled so that they don't publish news on people's lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #media #newspapers #information #lives #newspaper #news
'Right to freedom' and 'right to express' are basic pillars for media to report the details. At times, it may lead to dishonour 'right to privacy' though. Compromising anyone's private space
cann't
can not
can't
cannot
 be justified, in
fact it
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fact, it
 may compromise one's security sometimes. Certainly, few personalities are social figures and their actions can lead to motivate many.
Hence
, proper guidelines should be established for the media and should be imposed consistently. E.g.
publishing
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Publishing
 any news regarding an event to
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commence officially
inaugurate
 a fitness house by a celebrity or a
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supportive
 personality
,
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,
 may attract many followers and can
further
 give a tough time to the security personals and organizers.
This
 may create a havoc at times, and may end up in a stampede causing more damages.
On the other hand
, if the details of the event can be published without precise plan, and fans are
infomred
having much knowledge or education
informed
 later about the overall objectives and initiatives by the celebrity.
This
 may still help the purpose to make people aware
on
Suggestion
of
 the social cause. Every trait comes with pros and cons, and so is media reporting.
This
 a job to be handled with maturity
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 a sense of onus for any consequences. Reporters learn
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 over
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the job
 with the experience, but a group of seasoned professional setting up
such
 guidelines and a body to ensure the practice, would
definitley
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 help the objective of 'publish for public'.
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