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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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These days, the number of species on the verge of extinction is progressively increasing. While some people believe that more funds should be allocated to protect them, others think that the
money
 could be utilized for more pressing issues.
This
 essay will discuss why useful
money
 should not be spent wastefully on endangered breeds. As much as the government is trying its best to look out for endangered species, some people are still of the opinion that enough is not spent in
this
 course. They believe that they have rights to live freely without feeling threatened, even though they cannot speak for themselves.
Also
, they are very important part of the ecosystem. In zoology department of the University of Lagos,
for instance
, a proposal was made to the government to allocate 5% of the National budget to protect endangered species. For these reasons they think more
money
 should be spent on them
.
Accept space
.
Conversely
, I am of the opinion that human life is paramount to any other thing, and every measure should be taken to assure survival. There are other essential sectors that require
funds
Suggestion
funding
,
such
 as; health, education and so on. The health and education sector most especially are lagging behind and a lot of lives are lost daily due to the lack of hospitals, equipment and staff. In a study carried out recently it was revealed that over 1000 people die daily
as a result
 of common and treatable diseases.
This
 is to show that focusing more attention on
this
 aspect will increase the life span of humans. In conclusion, the
money
 spent on protecting endangered breeds is just enough for them and attention should be shifted to more pressing issues.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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