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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages

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Children are the blessings of God, having a child can make your life happier. Planning a child at an early
age
 or a later
age
 is a debatable topic. In
this
 essay we will argue that going for kids at a later
age
 is good or bad. In past it was common to become parents at an early
age
 of 20's but now people are getting married at the
age
 of 30's. Previously, people got married at a young
age
 and soon they planned for the
next
 generation. So, at the
age
 of 25-26 they were done with family planning and they have sufficient time to take care their offspring before getting retired. There was a lessor
age
 difference between the two generations. The most important thing at the early
age
, there are fewer chances of complications in pregnancy, so good for infants as well as mothers.
Although
 there are many benefits of having kids at early
age
 still now a day’s priority has been changed and people are more focusing on career, marriage and kids have become their secondary preference. There are some benefits of it,
that is
 more understanding between the partners, mentally prepared for marriage and child and successful career. With all these advantages, there are some disadvantages like health issues, not able to fulfil all liabilities of a kid before retirement and more
age
 gap. All in all planning, family is a choice of the individual, but I completely support the idea to plan for babies at a later
age
 as it gives you proper time to plan and understand your partner. Now a days many medical technology are there to help. So, I believe things give better results if planned in a proper way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delaying parenthood
  • financial stability
  • career advancement
  • personal goals
  • higher education
  • fertility treatments
  • relationship stability
  • health care improvements
  • personal development
  • postponing children
  • achieve milestones
  • family planning
  • modern society
  • life expectancy
  • paternal and maternal age
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