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When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#factor #appearance
People have an opinion that the usage of the building is the significant factor when designing it
instead
 of the outer appearance, whereas others have a viewpoint that the exterior aspect is the primary factor. I agree with the opinion that
although
 the external beauty of a building is important, but if it is not useful,
then
 the building is a waste.
Firstly
, there are many erections where the designs are not attractive, but they are very useful to the people in many ways.
Moreover
, the government nowadays are trying to spend more money on constructing erections which have the usage as their major priority like for accommodation to the poor people, as a library, hospitals and
also
 schools.
However
, all these are very important, because whatever the structure is the people will utilize it to fulfil their daily requirements.
For example
, in India we have the housing board facilities for people living in slums. Even though they are small, congested and the outward appearance is not attractive, but it gives an accommodation to people during all the climatic conditions and temperatures.
Secondly
, when erecting a house or a factory, the most important things to be noted are the area, materials, way it is availed and
also
 the design. Even though there are various constructions where the outer design is extraordinary, but due to high prices many middle- and low-class people are unable to use these.
For example
, there are various five-star hotels in India, where the building layouts are fantastic and extraordinary, but the public cannot make use of it on a daily basis, due to the high prices. In conclusion,
although
 the layout of an erections is necessary, but the way people avail them is the significant factor.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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