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Q: Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on the problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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These days, news channels are broadcasting more negative and alarming news
instead
 of focusing on achievements. While some people believe that
this
 can harm people, I would argue that it can benefit every person on its own and as a group.
Firstly
, by focusing more on the current problems, more awareness of these issues can be spread among the people.
This
 awareness is essential because individuals usually care about the short term impacts of their actions, and they tend to ignore the long-term consequences, which can eventually create terrible situations for any living creature.
For instance
, Amazon Rainforests, which covers around 70% of the total wildlife, recently got nearly vanished due to deforestation, became breaking news all over the world and resulted in a
lot
 of rescue and aid campaigns.
As a result
, it gained a
lot
 of attention and helped to change the mentality of the society.
Secondly
, by addressing these alarming reports, the government can be forced to take quick actions on the problems, which can often take years to get settled.
For example
, lands are often hit by Tsunamis and floods, which can many times result in no food and shelter. In
such
 cases, voluntary groups usually gather a
lot
 of funds using the platform of media. Not only
this
, but a
lot
 of rape and murder cases could be solved immediately, which may
otherwise
 be overlooked by the government.
This
 immediate action can set a positive example for every citizen of the country. In conclusion, I strongly support that flashing more disturbing and alarming news in
media
Suggestion
the media
 can have positive effects on the people like bringing into notice the horrible impacts of the people’s actions and creating positive pressure on the government.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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