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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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There are two opposite points of views about the living place. One of them is, living in a big
house
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 is fantastic, but the other one seems to be that it is much better to be in a small flat with just a couple of rooms. In fact, I agree with the
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 one, which is being in a big home has a lot of benefits, because living in a
house
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 is marvellous, and a lot of activities can be done there.
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 of all, there are some of the drawbacks that
make life
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make, life
 is really horrible. The two main things are, the noisy neighbours and the small place of the flat.
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, the noisy neighbourhood is abominable because the sound can transfer easily between flats.
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, if another apartment has small children and they just play,
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 will be so noisy to the
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 door people, especially for the students to study and for a man to take some rest from work. The
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 thing is, the small numbers of rooms in an apartment. To explain, there will be no places for the extended family to sleep or sit for two or three days.
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, living in a huge
house
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 is more beneficial, because of the large space that the houses have and
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, the availability of a garage to park the car in and be more comfortable.
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, people who live in a home can grow up a dog in the garden, not only a small pet but it can be a dog to guard them from thieves. There is a good example of the advantage of having an enormous
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 which is, people can invite their relatives to a picnic party at the outdoor part of the
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. To sum up, living in a gigantic home is being better and have some positives which are absent and cannot be available in smaller apartments.
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, children can have a big space to play in front of their parents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
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  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
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