Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Entertainment is an important
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of life, especially for young people in Vietnam
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many ways to enjoy their free time.
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watching
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is very popular because it is relaxing and can improve language skills. Especially when watching foreign films with subtitles.
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playing sports like football or badminton is both fun and good for health. And build teamwork. Sports
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provide opportunities for friendships and community spirit.
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, using social media helps young people connect with
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and follow new trends. And using social media can be fun
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providing knowledge and inspiration. These three forms of entertainment are enjoyable and useful for young Vietnamese today.

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