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Why local people do not visit the historical site and museums. Discuss the reasons and give a solution to this problem.

#people #visit #site #museums
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No doubt that natives are not intended to explore the historical places and the museums due to reasons, which I am going to describe in
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 paragraphs and
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 suggest the relevant strategies to encourage them to visit.
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, they are not aware about the glorious history of
their
in or at that place
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 as well as it is very common for them because it is located near to their home and have
tendency
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a tendency
the tendency
tendencies
 that they can get there at any time, which is discouraging them to observe the unusual objects which illustrates the past civilization of the region.
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, the number of foreign visitors of Tajmahal is far larger than Indians, which shows that how locals are lazy.
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, some NRI has a wider knowledge about the Indian past time than Indians.
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, some are being charged for entry which is the
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 prime reason behind the unpopularity among local people. Because they believe that why they should pay to know ancestors as they can receive
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 information from internet easily.
the
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The
 Rani ki wave is in Gujarat, demanding fees for entrance through which many few people going there to know about it, while, some locals are selling snacks for earning purposes, outside the wav. To tackle these types of situations, government should spread awareness among the public through seminars as well as authority should make these places the general public to raise the number of local visitors. In the conclusion, I opine that, it is in the hands of people to visit these sites or not because museums are for their own not for politics or others.
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