In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Nowadays,
people
in some countries tend to think that owning their home
is more important than renting one. This
choice has a number of benefits and drawbacks, which will be discussed in this
essay.
Some of the reasons for this
belief are the sense of owning and
investment that it may provide. Correct your spelling
an
People
usually rather buy their own home
because they can inherit it for their children someday because it is theirs, and
unlike Correct word choice
apply
people
who rent a home
and have to pay every month or year but still not
own the property. Add a missing verb
do not
Furthermore
, people
can do any renovations or decorations as much as they want. Moreover
, owning a property can be a good investment because they can rent or it may be sell again the building in the future, also
they can put the house as collateral in the bank.
In my opinion, this
can be a positive or negative situation. It can't be denied that owning a home
also
has its own drawbacks, such
as costing a lot of money in the front for the building, the documents, and others. Then
, by owning a house, there are several taxes to be paid and also
several insurances that must be fulfilled.
In conclusion, owning a home
is not a must, you can always rent one as long as you have shelter and your needs are provided. It depends on what you want, needs
, have, and future plan because what others need doesn't mean it is your needs as well.Correct subject-verb agreement
need
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