Overweight is a big concern so that is the reason?

#concern #reason

It is a bitter truth that lots of people are suffering from chronic diseases like blood pressure

Accept space

obesity due to overweight.There are

myraid

too numerous to be counted

myriad

reasons behind

this

deplorable condition.

This

essay will highlight some major causes and provide

few solutions

Suggestion

a few solutions

to overcome from it.

However

, doctors

are not diagnose

Suggestion

are not diagnosing

do not diagnose

don't diagnose

have not diagnosed

the disease on time and make huge concern in near future.Is overweight only responsible for any individual's health?

First

of all, lack of physical activity in daily routine is a primary reason for the overweight issue.

Moreover

, technology and automation revolution make people's life effortless.

In other words

, adolescents have been more addicted for fast food

such

as Chinese food and eat pizza and burger which will make them more unhealthy while adults are more focus on normal diet due to

disorderness

and they are only interested

for

Suggestion

rudimentary meals.

On the other hand

Accept space

society

have been organised

Suggestion

has been organised

various health

camps but

Accept comma addition

camps, but

people are not interested to attend and take it lightly but

this

will helpful for their health not others.

For example

, in India,

government

Suggestion

the government

has conducted various

program

Suggestion

programs

for

everyone but

Accept comma addition

everyone, but

is is not only any individual responsibility. Taking the fruits or ample vegetable in the diet and avoid junk food. In conclusion, overweight is a serious

issue but

Accept comma addition

issue, but

it can be

control

Suggestion

controlled

by taking

approciate

recognize with gratitude; be grateful for

appreciates

action and spread awareness for healthy environment.According to me,

everyone's

Suggestion

Everyone's

understanding is obligatory and take proper medicine before making it major concern in

future

Suggestion

the future

and

this

can happen because of human error.

Submitted by arpit.purohit93 on Sun Dec 08 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS writing?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

242 words

<40

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
People are staying more and more at home, these days. What are the causes and effects.
Nowadays, plenty of people prefer to stay at the place of their residence. This uprising trend is especially popular in the big cities of the developed countries. The reasons and possible aftermaths of the current behaviour I want to discuss in this essay.
5
band
The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all the shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?
The Internet is a widely used structure, especially in shopping. The future of classic shopping models is under threat on a platform where many alternatives are available at a fast and affordable price. However, there are so many shops in towns and cities, the Internet is spreading so rapidly that it will become more important in meeting our needs in the near future.
6.5
band
Some people think that it's easier for adults to learn skills (Ex: Computer skills) by themselves. Others think they need the help of a teacher in a classroom. Discuss both views and give your opinion as well.
Nowadays people find it easier to learn practical skills by themself; without the help of professionals. However, some people think, it is essential to learn with teachers . In this essay, I will analyse both of their opinions, as well as my own suggestion, since I believe self-learning in a disciplined way gives a better result for adults.
<4
band
Some people argue that because the Internet makes it so easy for children to access facts, schools should not focus on teaching facts. Instead, they should focus on developing children’s skills and potential, and their relationships with other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays, social media isn’t only used by younger people but also by older people. If 10 years ago it hardly to see an older person surf tiktok or facebook but nowadays, it isn’t difficult to see that. It’s not difficult to see an older person is using social media , the increasing of number older use social media give older people so more benefits like: help they to relax and decrease their lone,.... However, sometimes I think the older peope is spending too much time on social media and their health is decrease because they forget sleeping and eating. It really a bad problem of the most country today and improving this problem is a necessary shared task of more countries
7
band
International tourism has become more popular in recent decades. However, this can have a considerable impact on the countries which attract large numbers of visitors. What positive and negative effects does tourism have on countries which are popular destinations?
As everyone knows, a tourist attraction country could gain a range of benefits in the terms of commercial. However, this could bring out some drawbacks at the same time. Therefore, in this essay, I will describe both point of views, the positive and negative way, for several reasons that will explain in the following paragraphs.

Overweight is a big concern so that is the reason?

Fully explain your ideas

People are staying more and more at home, these days. What are the causes and effects.

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all the shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that it's easier for adults to learn skills (Ex: Computer skills) by themselves. Others think they need the help of a teacher in a classroom. Discuss both views and give your opinion as well.

International tourism has become more popular in recent decades. However, this can have a considerable impact on the countries which attract large numbers of visitors. What positive and negative effects does tourism have on countries which are popular destinations?