Overweight is a big concern so that is the reason?

It is a bitter truth that lots of people are suffering from chronic diseases like blood pressure
,
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,
obesity due to overweight.There are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
reasons behind
this
deplorable condition.
This
essay will highlight some major causes and provide
few solutions
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a few solutions
to overcome from it.
However
, doctors
are not diagnose
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are not diagnosing
do not diagnose
don't diagnose
have not diagnosed
the disease on time and make huge concern in near future.Is overweight only responsible for any individual's health?
First
of all, lack of physical activity in daily routine is a primary reason for the overweight issue.
Moreover
, technology and automation revolution make people's life effortless.
In other words
, adolescents have been more addicted for fast food
such
as Chinese food and eat pizza and burger which will make them more unhealthy while adults are more focus on normal diet due to
disorderness
and they are only interested
for
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in
rudimentary meals.
On the other hand
,
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,
society
have been organised
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has been organised
various health
camps but
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camps, but
people are not interested to attend and take it lightly but
this
will helpful for their health not others.
For example
, in India,
government
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the government
has conducted various
program
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programs
for
everyone but
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everyone, but
is is not only any individual responsibility. Taking the fruits or ample vegetable in the diet and avoid junk food. In conclusion, overweight is a serious
issue but
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issue, but
it can be
control
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controlled
by taking
approciate
recognize with gratitude; be grateful for
appreciates
action and spread awareness for healthy environment.According to me,
everyone's
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Everyone's
understanding is obligatory and take proper medicine before making it major concern in
future
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the future
and
this
can happen because of human error.
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