Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.

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Developed countries as we know have more
money
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than developing countries,
this
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sometimes make
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sometimes makes
them want to give aid in the form of financial support, but actually, it does not free them from financial problems. In order to give just
money
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, they have to involve more to solve the developing countries problems. Not all rich countries want to become deeply
involvedin
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involved in
other countries’
problems especially
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problems, especially
those of poor countries. One of the reasons is because they have different cultures and histories. It means, in order to understand all the problems that make a country poor, they have to understand the long history of their ancestors and it does not work with just one to two days research in that country, it needs deep research and understanding and not all developed countries want to do that. From the University’s researches, most of the problems of developing countries stem from
corrupt government
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a corrupt government
, so the
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money
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monetary
aid does not work. The
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thing that needs to be handled and help is the management system in the poor countries. They do not have the good standard operating procedures that protect the system from fraud. They should have some rules and technologies similar to those developed countries have.
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,
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,
in order to make the system work, the human resources should be trained by the rich countries.
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, students from poor countries could conduct some studies in
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developing countries
developed countries
to see the differences and benefits from being not only rich
,
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,
but
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good management systems of a country. To sum up, even though giving
money
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to countries that need aid is well-intended
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,
wealthy countries should be more
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involved in
giving real help to other countries especially the poor ones
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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