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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Everyone on
this
 planet earth is unique and has peculiar talent. The rare thing is the courage to follow it and thrive through it. Few people believe that struggle and effort invested in children to make them better sportsman or musician, while others believe that the gift given by god outweigh it. I opine that learnt talent with
interest
 will make a significant importance. It is well known fact that, if a person create a mindset to achieve specific goals and give full effort, no magic can stop him to get succeed.
Similarly
, if a child grew up in an environment where their parent involved him in certain sport and developed his
interest
 in it, It is likely for that child to pursue it.
Moreover
, there are various methods available and applied by guardian to develop subconscious mind of a kid to divert and think about achieving success in it.
In addition
, personal
interest
 makes a huge impact, it can lead to go into the depth of field.
However
, few people have skill from the birth. In fact, to rephrase the same thing, a talent to learn quickly in specific fields like music or sport. There can be certain reasons for that but major reason is the way they grew up or they have seen their relative or parent to pursue the same art and they know the path to adapt it quickly. Due to
this
, it makes sense for them to take the skill onto the
next
 level and achieve more respect from the world. To put
this
 in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
Accept comma addition
down, saying
 that, whether the latent is quick to learn or to adapt with struggle, self realisation and self
interest
 to learn and follow a passion will always lead to enormous contribution into that field.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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