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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work experience. In your letter • thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience • explain what you hope to learn from the work experience • ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
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 letter to express my gratitude for accepting me for the three-month work experience program at Rockwell Automation LTD. I am looking forward to getting a full hands-on experience working with your team, the work done by the company so far is very impressive.
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 I am there, I was hoping that some of my time could be spent with the plant manager as it would be very insightful to know about how he manages the entire plant and keeps it operating so efficiently.
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, I had some questions regarding the PPF, it is mentioned that I need safety shoes
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 safety glasses, as
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 do not have the glasses could the plant provide me with one
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 have all the required outfits and materials for
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 exciting program. Thank you for the opportunity, Krushang Patel

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use a more formal greeting; using 'Dear [Manager's Name]' if known, or 'Dear Hiring Manager' can enhance professionalism.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear separation of ideas in different paragraphs, such as having one specifically focused on your aspirations in the company and another for your questions.
task achievement
Try to include a closing statement that encourages further communication or expresses eagerness, which would help to round off the letter nicely.
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Your gratitude for the opportunity and the positive tone of the letter are commendable and set a warm tone for communication.
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You provided a clear intent about what you hope to learn during the experience, which aligns well with the prompt requirements.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • appreciative
  • hands-on experience
  • skill enhancement
  • networking opportunities
  • mentorship
  • organisational structure
  • company ethos
  • onboarding process
  • professional development
  • collaborative environment
  • shadowing
  • logistics
  • corporate attire
  • reporting hierarchy
  • team dynamics
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