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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed. What is your opinion about this?

#areas #curfew
It is undeniable that some part of America has become much more dangerous during the certain night hours for youngsters as compared to the past. Because of
this
 reason, a new regulation has been approved, which has been forbidden the allowance of teenagers to go out without an adult escort. Even though the legal practice seems like a restriction, in my opinion, it was necessary for safety reasons. The government has to consider the citizens' security and orient the regulations on behalf of their benefits. There are some similar laws that have been already practiced successfully for many years.
For instance
, teenagers have to use their vehicles with an experienced mature driver who has a valid driver license, in certain hours and places like highways.
This
 obligation is
also
 for containing youth safe.
However
, another reason for my support on the curfew is the increase in illegal activities in the US at nights. Some statistical reports from the Time Magazine have illustrated that the crime ratio climbed in some cities and has reached an unprecedented level since 1980s. Youth are easy targets for activities
such
 as robbery and drug use when they are alone at nights.
For instance
, gang members can use all sorts of tricks to entice a child to join them.
Nevertheless
, adult guidance can keep adolescences in a safer environment and society. In conclusion,
although
 the danger of the increase in crime rate in some specific cities of America at late hours, the government can protect its young citizens with the power of rule and support of adults.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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