Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages.

The museums around the world charge people for
admission
, while few others are free
,
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,
generally a museums are part of the historical
cultures
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culture
of the nation, so in my opinion is more better if charging people for
admission
. In
this
essay
,
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,
we are going discus two points of view. Like I previously uttered
,
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,
Itotally
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I totally
and strongly agree with
this
,
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,
all the
historical
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historic
location
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locations
have to put
aroll whice
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a roll, which
a roll whice
a roll which
aroll which
everyone has to spend entrance fees
,
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,
and all the money
ges
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
goes
to
adminstration
a method of tending to or managing the affairs of a some group of people (especially the group's business affairs)
administration
of the
place
,
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,
to improve facilities in the places
such
as adding a library or even garden. Here in Libya we
have Komes
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have come
have comes
came
are come
were coming
are coming
city
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city, for
for
example we
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example, we
found the great
place
are Leptis magna large historical location in
leptis
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Leptis
magna
ther
in or at that place
there
are no an entrance fee are required,
although
the
place
are
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is
nearly empty
,
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,
the
place
are almost neglacted
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is almost neglected
are almost neglected
by the government and، A lot of people don't know the
place
. I was precisely when I went with my husband to visit the
place
. We couldn't find it easily and there was no one to guide us.
Likewise
,
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,
allot of large places in
libya
a military dictatorship in northern Africa on the Mediterranean; consists almost entirely of desert; a major exporter of petroleum
Libya
are destroid
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is destroyed
are destroyed
are distressed
are distorted
and neglected, I thank if there is
admission
fee will be more alive.
Otherwise
,
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,
the
disadvantag
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantage
disadvantages
of
entrence fee
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an entrance fee
entrance fee
that poor people and folks with large family membranes cannot pay for
admission
and enjoying of the
bueaty
the qualities that give pleasure to the senses
beauty
of the history. To sum up we should bear in mind
that is
the museums charge for
admissiona re
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admission are
two_edged weapon
,
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,
so my
opinon
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
,
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,
the government role are the most important factor to prevent the
drowbacks
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
and to
decid
reach, make, or come to a decision about something
decide
,
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,
where we should pay and
,
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,
where we should not?
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