At the present time, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of the situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Lately, a plethora of topics are being seriously talked about among various individuals and groups, and
one
prominent topic is older people
. There are even people
who observe that the number of elders
in societies is much more than past. In the succeeding, this
situation whether the benefits over the disadvantages are to be discussed along with
the writer's view on the matter.
The first point to emphasise is the population of elder people
started being a burden. It is a common fact that governments operating and maintaining public systems rely on annual taxes taken from youngers at present the public funds are unable to afford it due to
the number of elders
being huge since the latest medical technologies extend the average lifespan of people
. To illustrate, a tax received from one
worker normally can cover two elders
for their health care or well-being system according to
related organizations report, but now the situation started the opposite, two workers for one
elder thereby already brings an enormous burden for adults. Hence
, the disadvantages are more than the advantages of this
phenomenon.
Another idea worth stressing is that adults are refusing to have children in this
situation. The reason is that they have no extra money to cultivate the next generations. To exemplify, a salary has to be consumed for elder care, daily costs, rental, fuel etc, especially, the first one
occupies a huge part of the pie. Moreover
, aged care is a big consumption as compared with others.
In conclusion, the large number of elders
in societies is because of medical advancement because they can enjoy a long lifespan, but it also
brings unnecessary weight to societal environments, especially, for adults.Submitted by rosolook on
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