More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that raising the price of fast foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of obesity is a serious health concern, especially for
youngsters as
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youngsters, as
they are more exposed to a wide variety of ready-made meals. Regarding question whether increasing the cost of
such
foods will restrict people from buying, I completely disagree because prices
does not seem
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do not seem
to be the only encouraging factor as we shall see.
To begin
with, higher
costs junk
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costs, junk
cost junk
cost cost junk
food does not
neccassarily
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
necessarily
mean that people will not buy it, to satisfy their cravings.
This
means that people who are habitual, will continue
this
pattern, despite the expensive prices of
such
foods.
For example
,
fastfood
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fast food
chains
such
as KFC, target children in their advertisement
such
as happy meals, force parents to fulfil the wishes of their loved ones. A better solution would be to improve the overall quality of
such
products by limiting the amount of preservatives and no compromise on the harmful ingredients they use.
This
will not only helpful for people, but
also
reduce the burden of healthcare facilities.
Furthermore
, the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
major reason for the excessive consumption of
fastfood
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fast food
is the hectic schedules of people, as they are not able to spare time to cook for themselves. In
such
situations, higher prices will only affect their income rather than their usage of
such
foods.
For example
, in Pakistan, working parents often opt for pre-cooked meals, rather than having a maid to cook for them and their children, because
this
would be
the more expensive option
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a more expensive option
more expensive option
than buying
junkfoods
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junk foods
.
This
can be resolved only by providing
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
of the negative effects of
such
products, and allow more home-based tools
such
as rice-makers to ease the process of preparing meals. In conclusion, it is logical to accept that higher prices will restrict people’s access to
fastfoods
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fast foods
.
However
, reforming the strategies for cooking at commercial outlets and subsidizing home-based cooking tools would appear to be much more effective to overcome
this
issue.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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