People today know fewer of their neighbors than in the past. Why is this? What can be done to solve this problem?

The probability of people knowing their
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbour
is far less now than in the past.
This
trend is mainly due to long working hours and
dependency
Suggestion
depends
on technology.
However
, there are a number of measures that can be implemented to resolve
this
issue. One of the reasons for realizing limited
community
members is due to the increase in the amount of office work especially in urban areas. Because of
high competition
Suggestion
the high competition
in the consumer market each and every company wants to deliver product on
time which
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time, which
resulted in
drastic increase
Suggestion
a drastic increase
drastic increases
in effort and
time
required for any employee. Breadwinners has to put in more effort and additional hours to finish tasks within the given
time
period, due to which employees spend less
time
with their friends and family.
In addition
to that, the advancement in technology caused most of the public to communicate via text message or over the phone rather than meeting in person which in turn lead to reduced face
time
with each other.
This
can be resolved using
number
Suggestion
a number
of ways so that improvement in knowing each other in the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
increases.
Firstly
, governments and corporate bodies should reduce the working hours of its employees at all levels and adopt flexible working hours so that office workers get more
time
to mingle with other fellow colleagues as well with friends, families and
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
which in turn
raises
Suggestion
raise
interaction with surrounding communities.
Secondly
,
community
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
centres
should be built and
community
members should be invited to conduct social meetings to meet and greet each other face to face
this
way the communication as well as the sense of bonding between
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
can be made strong. I concede that
this
would be
difficult task but
Suggestion
a difficult task, but
a difficult task but
by
these ways
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these, ways
people can come closer together and develop a sense of knowing each other very well. In conclusion, the lack of
community
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
and the wide gap between social circle and local communities lead to disconnect in
neighborhood
Suggestion
the neighbourhood
neighbourhood
. Only when governments and corporate bodies are able to ensure its employees about reducing working hours at all levels, will
this
situation be remedied.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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