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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some nations young adults are inspired to take up employment or tour the world for twelve months between leaving high
school
 and enrolling into higher institution. Youths who decide to travel or work gain valuable experience, but there are drawbacks to be considered. One of the benefits of encouraging young adults to get a job or travel before enrolling in the university is that they gain valuable experience.
That is
, they acquire knowledge that will help them in life endeavours later in life when they are faced with difficult situations especially in the university.
For example
, my cousin, James, was able to handle his relationships adequately with people while at the university because of the experience he had while attending a seminar on relationships immediately he finished high
school
. So, touring or working after secondary
school
 opens the avenue to gain knowledge.
However
, one problem, when youngsters pick up employment or tour the world is that it potentially makes them lose focus.
In other words
, they get carried away by the happenings in the world or with the fact that they are making money, and will not want to
further
 their education. Take
for instance
, my neighbour’s son who was opportune to learn how to develop softwares when he finished high
school
. He makes good money from it and has refused furthering to higher institution despite persuasions.
Therefore
, touring or working can make young adults lose focus. In conclusion, while youngsters can benefit from travelling and working, they can get carried away with making money, which can be detrimental in the long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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