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Band 8.5

Practice 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter, •describe the situation •explain why you cannot continue at this time •say what action you would like to take You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any ad

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Dear John Smith, I am writing regarding the course I have been continuing at your institute for six months and I would like to discontinue it now. I am currently studying Information Technology in the evening batch. The reason to drop
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 education is lack of time. I am working full-time and my job location is quite opposite to your school. It will almost take two hours for me to travel.
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, I usually feel exhausted
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 my hectic work.
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, winter is coming in a few weeks,
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 I am unable to cope with the time. I will continue my study after four months when the weather conditions will change. I can study online. If there is a possibility to convert my in-person session to distance learning education. Unless I have to apply for an unofficial drop from study. I hope you will consider my situation and come up with possible solutions. Yours sincerely. Harpreet Kaur.

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task achievement
To achieve a higher score in task achievement, aim to expand on the reasons why it is difficult to continue the course and how these challenges are impacting you. This level of detail can help better illustrate your situation.
task achievement
Ensure that your letter maintains a consistent tone. While generally suitable, there were moments where the tone could have been more formal and polite, particularly in the closing remarks.
coherence cohesion
The letter was well-structured with clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single main idea. This helped in maintaining a logical flow throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing were appropriately used, providing a clear start and conclusion to the letter.
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