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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is widely argued that government should impose a strict
law
 to prevent
noise
pollution
 becoming a means of disruption to other people.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a strict
law
 against
noise
pollution
. Having a firm
law
 against the
noise
 caused by the people will certainly benefit others. It will help in reducing
noise
pollution
 as well as it will in reducing health effect like stress, hearing loss and communication problems. Imposing a rule to control
noise
 will have a greater impact to reduce
noise
pollution
 while if
noise
 is reduced children, old people, and animals would suffer from hearing loss, stress and poor concentration.
For instance
, in INDIA during festival season
noise
pollution
 increases by 40% than normal days.
This
 leads to hearing loss in children and animal,
also
 affecting their health.
Nevertheless
, we cannot control certain
noise
 like industrial, drilling, construction. For every country developed or developing, need industries and has to build new infrastructure in order to meet the requirements.
However
, if there is a
law
 to stop
noise
Suggestion
the noise
,
then
 there would be no development.
For example
, even for building a normal tar road there are various machinery is involved from drilling, rolling mill,
tar
Suggestion
the tar
-laying truck. It is not possible to stop the
noise
that is
 made by these machines In conclusion, there should be a certain restriction on the
noise
 caused by people as there are various health problem related to it, but it should
also
 be considered that certain sounds cannot be controlled
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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