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Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement?

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Nowadays, crime has become a highly delicate issue of the society to handle.
Although
 it is believed by some that criminals will always be into crimes once they commit it. I totally disagree, with the above fact and
this
 essay shall support my notion.
To begin
 with, According to the
law
 people who commit crimes are punished, it creates fear among them. Which will make them think twice before attempting it again.
For instance
, The recent survey of the police department in China shows, 70 percent of the offenders do not re-offend any illegal activities in order to avoid punishments. If criminals continue to break the
law
,
then
 they may face life term imprisonment.
Therefore
, due to
this
 reason many deter crimes in future. Another significant reason is, many of them not only face shame in the society, but
also
 feels discriminated by people, so to ameliorate their status in the community they stay away from any wrongdoings. Because of their previous acts, they become more vigilant and impeccable in their living.
Thus
,
this
 is indispensable for them to gain back their respect in the society, even if they committed some crime before. In conclusion, despite the thinking of people that once a
law
 offender is always a
law
 offender, I strongly disagree. As many do not commit crimes again, and try to be faithful towards their
law
.
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