Write a letter to a park authority about damage being made to the facilities of the park.

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Farrukh. I am

the

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resident of diamond house society, Islamabad. I am writing

this

letter to appraise you with some problems that locals are facing at Jonah park in our vicinity. Let me explain it in detail. The park was supposed to be managed by the

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gardeners every day;

however

, they do not come to work for even days. The grass in the lawn of the garden has become so long that it has become difficult to even walk there.

In addition

, wooden benches where old people used to sit for hours every day have broken.

Furthermore

, all exercise

equipments

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like weight lifters need to

repaint

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. I would like you to take notice of all these issues in order to maintain the property. As you know parks are the lungs of the community, they have to be in a good shape. It would

also

be great for children to visit parks because they are becoming couch potatoes owing to sit idle at home. Hoping for

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prompt action from your side! Farrukh Maqsood

Submitted by farrukh.maqsood on Thu Dec 12 2019

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

182 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a letter to a park authority about damage being made to the facilities of the park.

The Closing

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