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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates have more influence on a child’s success at school than parents do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Teammates play a greater role
to
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in
 a child's success at
school
 than the parents. I agree with the statement.
This
 essay will discuss that due to the fact that they spend more time in
school
 than at home and pick up habits, classmates have a greater influence on their peer success than his parent. Students spend an average of 12 hours in
school
 than when they are at home. Even though, the return home after
school
 most time is spent reading and preparing for the
next
 day at work. A research conducted by the Times newspaper, state that a child tend to spend an average of 15 hours with his course mate due to the fact they share the same
school
 and they copy their behaviours. Habits are
most
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mostly
 what one tends to do frequently. Most children pick up habits from their course mates, because they see each other more.
For Example
, a
students
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student
 was asked why he likes
play
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playing
 keyboard. He
respond
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responds
 because he saw his other classmate doing
same
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the same
. In conclusion, classmates have a greater influences on children because the spend more time in
school
 than with their parents.

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