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Life now is better than 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people argue that life in the past was tougher than the current era, some think nowadays viability is worse than years ago for some reasons. I personally agree that today is easier to exist than the ancient times.
Firstly
, it is generally accepted that alive in the 21st century is a delight for everyone, due to it is easy to go anywhere by various transportations
such
 as motorcycle, car, ship,
airplane
, etc. Following
this
further
, distance is no longer a problem for people.
For example
, on the same date, I could go to two different countries with
airplane
Suggestion
the airplane
, it only needs hours to reach thousand kilometre gap by
airplane
.
As a result
, travelling abroad becomes a trend, especially for 20s people.
Besides
 transportation, people nowadays tend to cut off the space with telecommunication technology
such
 as mobile phones and the internet.
Furthermore
, people could communicate with others from around the world by talking through phones or texting on internet with media social.
On the other hand
, 100 years ago, transportation and communication technology had not existed yet, back
then
, people only walk or ride the horse to severe places,
also
 most of the ancient carved the stones for addressing the others.
In addition
, food has changed from time to time. It is common to find the fried chicken in most restaurants over the world,
also
 many people love it.
Nevertheless
, a hundred years ago the ancient human did not eat fried chicken
hence
 they did not know about flour and other spices to make fried chicken. They tend to eat raw meat or vegetables without spices. It is difficult to imagine to eat those foods these days.
Thus
, raw foods contain many bacteria that cause many diseases. Taking everything into consideration, it is my opinion that life in
this
 current world is more uncomplicated for cutting gap and hour,
also
 more concern about food, compared with the past period.
Submitted by zramadhanis on

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