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some people believe that social network site is both advantageous and disadvantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree??

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Social networking sites,
for instance
 Facebook, are thought by some to have had a detrimental effect on individual people as well as society and local communities.
However
, while I believe that
such
 sites are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging cause on local communities. With regards to individuals, the impact that online social media have had on each individual person has clear advantages.
Firstly
, people from different countries are brought together through
such
 sites as Facebook whereas before the development of technology and social networking sites, people rarely had the chance to meet or communicate with anyone outside of their immediate circle or community.
Secondly
, Instrgarm
also
 has social groups which offer individuals a chance to meet and participate in discussions with people who share common interests.
On the other hand
, the effect that Twitter and other social networking sites have had on societies and local communities can only be seen as negative. Rather than individual people taking part in their local community, they are
instead
 choosing to take more interest in people online.
Consequently
, the people within local communities are no longer forming close or supportive relationships.
Furthermore
, society as a whole is becoming increasingly disjointed and fragmented as people spend more time online with people they have never met face to face and who they are unlikely to ever meet in the future. To conclude,
although
 social networking sites have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same influence on society or local communities. Local communities should do more to try and involve local people in local activities in order to promote the future of community life.
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