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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than of other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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People always argue that our own literature must be given the
first
 priority and its significance must be taught more to the children rather than that of other countries. Indeed, I agree with
this
 viewpoint that by learning our past, a young generation will gain more knowledge about various things.
Firstly
, by learning the literary works of their own nation, children can have an idea about what their place is, the details about great leaders, their good works
besides
 they will
also
 know the importance of monuments built and the significance of festivals.
However
, there were many unknown leaders, movements and many artistic works
that is
 hidden from the outside world, and through the education we could teach the young adults about all these.
For instance
, young adults know the reason for celebrating the Independence Day about Mahatma Gandhi, Jawaharlal Nehru, but previously there were many freedom fighters, who waged many battles with the Britishers and trying to drive them away from our country and
this
 is untold to the children.
On the other hand
, the history books of the present are having a mixture of unnecessary details about the world wars, cold wars and importance of other countries monuments and structure.
For example
, in my history book there were 10 chapters out of which 6 were related to world wars, cold war, the Chinese revolution and
also
 about the Russian revolution.
Moreover
, information about Indian history, freedom fighters and battles waged were very less, just a 4 lines paragraph.
Although
, having a view about other country’s achievements will not harm these young ones, but still the education system’s foremost preference must be given to their own country’s culture. In conclusion, it would be nice if the youngsters gain more awareness about the literary works of their own nation and an equal prominence can be given to other cultures
also
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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