Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than of other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #children #literature #country #countries

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

People always argue that our own literature must be given the

first

Linking Words

priority and its significance must be taught more to the children rather than that of other countries. Indeed, I agree with

this

Linking Words

viewpoint that by learning our past, a young generation will gain more knowledge about various things.

Firstly

Linking Words

, by learning the literary works of their own nation, children can have an idea about what their place is, the details about great leaders, their good works

besides

Linking Words

they will

also

Linking Words

know the importance of monuments built and the significance of festivals.

However

Linking Words

, there were many unknown leaders, movements and many artistic works

that is

Linking Words

hidden from the outside world, and through the education we could teach the young adults about all these.

For instance

Linking Words

, young adults know the reason for celebrating the Independence Day about Mahatma Gandhi, Jawaharlal Nehru, but previously there were many freedom fighters, who waged many battles with the Britishers and trying to drive them away from our country and

this

Linking Words

is untold to the children.

On the other hand

Linking Words

, the history books of the present are having a mixture of unnecessary details about the world wars, cold wars and importance of other countries monuments and structure.

For example

Linking Words

, in my history book there were 10 chapters out of which 6 were related to world wars, cold war, the Chinese revolution and

also

Linking Words

about the Russian revolution.

Moreover

Linking Words

, information about Indian history, freedom fighters and battles waged were very less, just a 4 lines paragraph.

Although

Linking Words

, having a view about other country’s achievements will not harm these young ones, but still the education system’s foremost preference must be given to their own country’s culture. In conclusion, it would be nice if the youngsters gain more awareness about the literary works of their own nation and an equal prominence can be given to other cultures

also

Linking Words

Sun Dec 15 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

12
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

310 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

Native literature
Cultural identity
Heritage
Traditions
National pride
Language skills
Idiomatic expressions
Engagement
Relatability
Broaden perspectives
Cultural awareness
Open-mindedness
Literary heritage
Bias
Diverse perspectives
Global community
Domestic vs. international literature
Cultural nuances
Sense of belonging

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

8
band
Some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environment should no longer exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?
Many people argue that zoos, where creatures are contained in artificial enclosures, should be banned in this century. This essay totally agrees with this statement because it is cruel to keep an animal in a confined space, and nature programs allow us to view animals without the need for a zoo.
7.5
band
It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
As science and technology have improved by leaps and bounds, a great many traditional cultures Worldwide have been lost and the trend may continue in the future, which makes some people believe that both aspects cannot coexist in a proper manner. From my perspective, I am not in favour of this view. While traditional cultures are facing extra challenges due to the popularization of high machinery, cultures and technology are compatible. They are inclusive rather than exclusive.
7
band
Nowadays, traffic is a serious problem in big cities. Why this is so and what effects does it bring?
In this day and age, traffic congestion has become a huge problem in many developed cities. I believe the reasons for this are the ever-climbing number of vehicles and poor traffic discipline. Like any problem, this can also be fixed. People can take public transport rather than travel in their own vehicles, and governments can take the initiative and make traffic rules stricter.
5
band
Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
If I was asked where I would I prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building, I think, I would hesitate to answer. This question, from my point of view, is a controversial one. In the following paragraphs I will analyze both these options and present my view.
4.5
band
Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause?What are the solutions?
The number of full-time employment older people have been escalating at an increasing rate in today's community, and this situasion lead to a significant competition with young generations. This essay demonstrates fistly the metters of this social-economic issue such as ageing population and inflation by following an analysis of some suggestions like work divition of labor to mitigate the certain problem.

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than of other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environment should no longer exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Nowadays, traffic is a serious problem in big cities. Why this is so and what effects does it bring?

Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause?What are the solutions?