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Today people are traveling more than ever before. What is the reason? Benefits of traveling?

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An increasing number of people around the world are travelling these days as never seen before.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss its possible reason, which is the advent of commercial airlines, and I believe the primary benefit of travelling is to become
relax
Suggestion
relaxed
 and enjoy the new atmosphere, climate, and way of living. The most crucial reason that attracts people to travel is the introduction of multiple
budget
 airlines. Many countries have introduced low-cost airlines since the recent past, who offered an affordable priced air ticket, which enabled people to travel wherever they like to, regardless of their income, like, Air Malaysian, a Malaysian airline and, West jet, a Canadian airline.
As a result
, tourism has increased tremendously worldwide.
For example
, a recent survey found that around 40% of people
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
 to China from western countries after the start of the
budget
 airlines worldwide. Concerning the question of the advantage of travelling, I think travel
bring
Suggestion
brings
 enjoyment to people's life. The trip allows people to take time off from work and relax by getting into a new environment and living. Travelling rejuvenates and eliminates the monotony boredom of the busy life of a competitive world.
Therefore
, millions of people visit the tourist resort each year.
For instance
, a recent study revealed that nearly 90 % of hill station resorts in India are
priorly
in the right manner
properly
 booked, and people are getting reservation dates after two years down the road. In conclusion, being travelling by
budget
 airlines are getting popular day by day, and everyone can visit their dream destination within their tight schedule and
budget
, enjoy their vacation and become stress-free
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