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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems.

#diet #meat #health
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When it is perfectly possible to lead a healthy life by eating plant-based
food
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, I see no justification for killing birds or animals for our
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.
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, I completely agree with the argument that everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet. There are several benefits
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 following a vegetarian diet. To start with, plant-based
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 is rich in vitamins, minerals, anti-oxidants and other nutrients required for good health. What’s more, most fruits and vegetables contain little or no cholesterol or calories. Research has shown that vegetarians are less likely to develop health-related problems like obesity, cancer or heart diseases. Health benefits are not the only reason to follow a vegetarian diet. When we obtain our
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 from plants, we can
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 stop cruelty to animals.
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, non-vegetarian foods
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 as fish and
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 are high in cholesterol, fat and calories. Regular consumption of red
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 is known to increase a person’s risk of cancer and heart disease.
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, unlike fruits or vegetables, fish and
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 cannot be eaten raw. The slaughtered animal may have some illness. If half-cooked
meat
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 is eaten, it can cause deadly infections in human beings. In fact, many cases of
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 poisoning are caused by the consumption of contaminated
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. The quality of non-vegetarian
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 has
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 deteriorated over the years. Seafood has become contaminated due to the pollution in ocean water. It is a well-known fact that farm animals are given steroids to grow rapidly. When we eat their
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, the steroid
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 enters into our body.
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 leads to several problems like precocious puberty in children. To conclude, vegetarian diets are healthy and do not constitute cruelty to animals.
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, I believe that everyone should adopt vegetarianism

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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