Many people think that money is the best gift to give a teenager, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion including relevant examples.

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Some would argue that teenagers should be given
money
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as a
gift
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, while others oppose it. While
money
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could fulfil some of their essential needs, I believe that youngsters could misuse it to buy materials that have
negative impact
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a negative impact
on them if given as a present. On the one hand, when youth between 13 to 19 are availed of a certain amount of finance, they could
use
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it to spend on some of their important
necessity
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necessities
.
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is to say that there are certain items that they
need but
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need, but
are ashamed of asking it to their parents or relatives.
For example
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, girls in Nepal are hesitant to discuss about their puberty and ashamed of their natural menstruation cycle, which forces them to
use
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old clothes as a sanitary pad, that may contain bacteria,
instead
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of safer products available in the market.
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, I believe that most mothers are open about these things with their teenage daughters and provide
such
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items without being asked.
On the other hand
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, youngsters
use
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the
money
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, given as a present, to purchase
unnecessary item
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an unnecessary item
that may pose a negative effect.
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means youth
think
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thinks
that gifted
money
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is to fulfil their personal desire and they are not required to explain their parents where they have spent that amount.
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, they may end up buying the materials they are not supposed to have or
use
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.
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, a recent survey revealed that 30% of the teens in the USA spend their extra pocket
money
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to buy illegal medicines; so a financial
gift
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would only encourage them to do more and others to start.
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, allowing teenagers to own
money
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as a
gift
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tend them to
use
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it in a subject that may have a detrimental effect on them. In conclusion,
although
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the financial
gift
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is crucial for some teenagers because it enables them to
purchace
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
purchase
purchased
an item
that is
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extremely important for them, I believe that most of them would misuse it in the product that have
adverse result
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an adverse result
adverse resulted
adverse results
on
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in
of
them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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