Large members of visitors can endanger ancient archeological sites such as Machu Plcchu. In your opinion, is it more important to try to preserve such sites or allow public access to them?

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that human history has history more than 2000 years.
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excavations with technology power reveal new residential
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and ancient historical constructs.
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,
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these archeological
sites
and constructs is the most important case for
governments
and becoming great
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responsibility
for citizens.
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citizens and
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other
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,
however
simultaneously they must preserve these unique
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and constructs. Preserving these unique
sites
is crucial because
of
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that means carrying
from
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generation to generation of the history. In addition
to
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governments
must protect them than even least touching or threats for safe of these
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and constructions. These constructs would be impress and
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than least touch, taking a photographer and so do. Simultaneously
governmemts
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government
must exhibit these
sites
. Citizens and
releated
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related
other
people
could access these
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, because
of
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these constructs provide many
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about
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culture
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information.
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these
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ancient residential places and style of life.
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who
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whether or not
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related
people
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and researchers.
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important not only own
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of cultural releationship. Taking into account all of these, it should be that historical
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,
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accessed by the
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these unique
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than
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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