In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.

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In today's world we cannot deny that technology has

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private role in our lives. People use technology

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to do their

works

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work

faster than past

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time but

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time, but

sometime technology lead us a more

mistake

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)

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to help them to use their task faster than

past

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the past

. But a controversial question that arises among people is whether we should work quickly and take

risk eventhough

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risks, even though

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risks even though

risks eventhough

we do our

works

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work

mistake

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. Some people

beleives

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believe

believes

believed

that speed is very fundamental in todays world, so we should do our

works

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work

as soon as possible. The other people think that if you accept one task you should do it correctly and it is more important than speed. I agree with the

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group because of two crucial reasons. In what follows, I will

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locate exactly

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my causes. The

first

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noteworthy reason is that, some of the mistakes are

discompensating

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and the companies or people should spend a lot of money or

time

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to fix the

proble

a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved

problem

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, I think each person should do his or her work

correct even

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correct, even

though spend a

pelenty

a full supply

plenty

time

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for that.

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, My friend

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Zahra

worked for a famous company in

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the capital and largest city of Iran; located in northern Iran

Tehran

. She

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is always being

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a hurry

and did her work

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quickly

without any precise. One day he

did

produced by a manufacturing process

made

a bad

mistake

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in his calculation and the company

lose

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loses

a lot of its investment because of her

mistake

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, my friend fired and the company spent a lot of money to

compancate

adjust for

compensate

the

mistake

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of her. The

second

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convincing reason is that at the

end we

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end, we

can say that the people who works slower and more accurate than the other people can save more

time

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Group

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A group

sientices

a person with advanced knowledge of one or more sciences

scientists

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Harvard University

design

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designs

an experiment about

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issue. They investigate two groups of people. The

first

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group consists of people who do more risk in comparison to the other groups. At the end of the experiment, people

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who did the risk, did much more

mistake

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and they force to

compencate

adjust for

compensate

complicate

their

mistake

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Hence

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, the groups who

works

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work

slower finished their general works sooner than the

first

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group. In short, all the reasons

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as mentioned above, lead us to the conclusion that we should do our

works

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work

slowly and correctly. If we did our works correct, we will get a better result at the end.

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In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

There are those who consider work to be the paramount aspect of life, suggesting that without career success, life loses its meaning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter, describe what this book was about explain how this book influenced you say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for every one. To what extent do you agree?

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative effect on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?