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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Access to reliable and state of the art medical facilities is important for the people of any country. Advancement in medical
treatment
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 and medical technology has dramatically increased its cost over the
last
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 few years and has made it unaffordable for many people in the society.
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, it is a primary duty of the state to take care of their people and provide them free
health
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 services.
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, it would be extremely difficult for unemployed and aged people to afford medical treatments in the absence of free
health
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 services. As they do not have any source of income,
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 it makes them more susceptible to death in the case of illness.
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 to
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, the government is responsible for the wellness of its citizens and
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 should take necessary actions to improve people's
health
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 by providing them lofty
treatment
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 without charging any single penny.
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, the
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 care services should be prioritising. People may have access to consultation and other general services without any restrictions. It is their legitimate right given by the government, to avail quality medical
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 free of cost.
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, some disease
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 as cancer and heart attack are more vulnerable and demand more attention and care,
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 making its
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 more expensive.
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, free access to more specialises and expensive
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 may need some restrictions and should need some legislation to select limited patients because of excessive cost involved. To sum up, I would like to say that
health
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 is the primary constituent of people's lives.
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, it should be funded and supported by government to provide better
health
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 services to their citizens without charging them.

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