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Many people buy new phones and laptop to keep up with the latest technology. Is it a good or bad thing?

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The past 50 years have seen a tremendous amount of growth in the technological industry. To be on par with the latest inventions, a large amount of the population buys brand new phones and laptops.
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 is a destructive trend as it results in money wastage and spoiling of children.
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 of all, it is an indisputable fact that phones and laptops are expensive to buy nowadays and a major part of the population cannot afford it, but keeping up with the latest technology has become a trend to enhance their social status, especially among the youth.
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, Apple products often instills a sense of opulence in the population who owns them as they are expensive to buy. Flaunting their over-priced new phones or laptops on social media has become a trend and many obsessed people buy their products, even when they do not require it, just for the sole purpose of bragging.
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, by looking at the promotion of these costly devices, children force their parents to buy them these products.
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, since the technology is growing rapidly, new products are released every year and promoted widely,
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, children discard their old phones or laptops and badger their parents to buy them the latest products.
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, children become spoiled with no regards for hard earned money or care for their old tech. In conclusion, keeping up with the latest technology might seem enticing at
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, but is a negative development as it wastes precious money of the people on materialistic things and
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 strips children of respectful and caring nature.

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