Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is generally accepted by some people that there should be predetermined penalty for every form of unlawful

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, while others disagree that the situation of each offence and the reason for performing the

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should be considered when applying necessary discipline. In my opinion, there should be established retribution for each illegal

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with allowance for exceptions as

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will largely reduce

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crime rates

the crime rate

and promote sanity in every community. Some believe that the absence of fix consequence for every offence has largely contributed to the global increase in

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rate.

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was supported by the global

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report recently released by Smart Inc. –

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US based research firm. The report stated that most of the

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atrocities

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two decades have no moral justification whatsoever. It

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asserted that

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a series

of investigations demonstrated that some of the convicted criminals confessed that they were motivated to commit these crimes because of the possibility of escaping the right judgement.

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, another school of thought is of the opinion that the motive behind the

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should not be completely separated from the

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is because, sometimes, the unlawful acts are perpetrated when they are genuinely indisposed to do so.

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, during a monthly radio

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program in Ghana, a man narrated his ordeal when he was attacked by thieves. He said these men had gained access to his compound with one of them already in his sitting room. Fortunately, while the others were trying to enter, the

police men

a member of a police force

policemen

came around after they had been informed and

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made the armed men to leave with the exception of one who he eventually killed.

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, he was condemned of murder, he was discharged and acquitted because the police attested to his innocence. In conclusion, I believe that there should be solid charge for every criminal

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while provisions are given for certain acts proven beyond reasonable doubt of honesty.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

325 words

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