Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is
considering
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considered
, that whether
the young
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younger
the younger
generations should be allowed to work to earn
money
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, or would
this
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attitude
have
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has
a negative impact on their lives. I tend to believe that, while having a paid job may have its own benefits, but the drawbacks of it will overcome them. To start with the positives of making
money
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through working, one of the main benefits of
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likely to become more financially independent.
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is because, more and more
money
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children will earn,
then
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less and less stuff they will ask for their parents to buy.
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, if a teenager starts to receive one hundred dollars weekly, he or she will be able to cover some of his or her expenses without receiving financial support from their family members.
As a result
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of
this
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, children may be better prepared for the job market in terms of freedom to make a choice and realize its consequence.
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, there are some disadvantages of
this
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choice,
such
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as possible
distructions
mental turmoil
distractions
distraction
for children in
successing
the right to enter
accessing
succeeding
at their studies at school and other negative impacts on their future.
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, in spite of the possible benefits
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of
having paid work, it may distract pupils from doing homework, as there will be less time for preparing it.
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, if young people do not tend to dedicate themselves for studies due to lack of time, they will be less-educated and mostly not be hired for senior
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potions
possessions
in the future. To conclude,
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earning
money
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may bring some feeling of independence in terms of finance for children, it will likely to interrupt their learning process and be an obstacle for them for receiving managerial jobs in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • financial independence
  • responsibility
  • valuable skills
  • impact
  • education
  • exploitation
  • negative effects
  • social life
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