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Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching with the technology available today, there is no justification for it, and everything should be online. To what extent do you agree or disagree? give your own opinion

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Cars have become a fundamental need of mass life,
besides
 food, clothing and shelter. Certain people understand that pollution is inclining due to cars in
this
 modern era, while others thing oppose on it. I strongly favour in
this
 notion. I will discuss my views and give my opinion in paragraphs
Firstly
, there are numerous causes, why cars become an essential part of lifespan? The main reason is comfortable. In past
time
, people take walking as well as use cycle for reaching one destination to another destination,
therefore
 they waste a lot of
time
. But, in modern days people utilize
car
 and easily reach on destination, which they want to go there. People do not waste
time
 for waiting bus and train. By using
car
 mankinds travel with whole family.
Secondly
, cars have crucial for those families, where elderly people are living. Since, they suffer with widespread diseases and emergency
time
 that family use the
car
 and reach easily in the hospital.
As a result
 mankinds save that patient.
On the other hand
, some drawbacks of cars. The main is pollution. Cars burn a lot of fuel, namely petrol as well as diesel. It emission chemical gases like carbon dioxide and mono oxide, which are not ideal for atmosphere.
Hence
 people suffer with dangerous diseases.
Such
 as skin cancer and asthma. Apart from
this
, by pollution. Climate is changing throughout the
time
 the period. Summer become so hotter and winter become so cold.
Besides
 it, the glacier is melting day by day. The level of the sea in incline, which is become the cause of the tsunami and fled In conclusion,
although
 cars have a lot of merits,
nevertheless
 human beings cannot forget of the disadvantages.
Hence
 people less use of cars, when they need of a
car
.
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